This candidate has written a sentence which is grammatically correct; however, they have “over-generalized” an idea. Certainly, not all people who smoke suffer from many diseases! This over-generalized statement could lead to a lowered band score, especially if it occurs frequently.
So, how do you avoid it? Using the two powerful phrases below you could “soften your language”:
“to be likely to + verb”
“to tend to + verb ”
These phrases are accurately used in the following sentences:
“People who smoke are likely to suffer from many diseases.”
“People who smoke tend to suffer from many diseases.”